Creating supporting detail paragraphs:
To make the body of our essay we need to expand the supporting details we wrote eariler into three separate paragraphs.
Q) How do we do this?
Take each of the supporting detail sentences and think of some information that explains them more completely.
for example:
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He was a team leader.
(motivated his teammates, gave a lot of good advice, acted responsibly)
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He demonstrated great athletic ability.
(scored 3 goals, practiced hard between games, when everyone else was tired and slowing down, he continued to give his best effort and work hard,)
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He played even though he was injured.
(played with an injured knee, doctors told him it was risky, Mr. X stated that he played because his team needed him.)
We can now make three paragraphs out of the information above.
for example:
Mr.X was the most valuable player because he was a team leader. He motivated his teammates to play their best and not give up. Furthermore, he also gave them good advice to improve their performance. Finally, he also acted responsibly and advised the fans to act peacefully.
In addition to to being a team leader, Mr. X demonstrated great atheletic ability. He scored three goals in the last game and always practiced hard between games. Additionally, when everyone else was tired and slowing down, he continued to give his best effort and work hard. This resulted in his team's victory.
Not only did Mr. X demonstrate great atlethic ability; he also played even though he was injured. He played the last two games with an injured knee. The doctors told him it was risky to continue to play and that he could permanently damage his knee. However, Mr. X stated that he played because his team needed him.
*Notice that the first sentence in each supporting detail paragraph was a transition sentence. A transition sentence connects paragraphs together and makes your essay sound more smooth.
